I look foward to more story!
I like this story that you have come up with, but, I do have some gripes...it takes to long to get from point A to point B, an example would be the very begining, that could of been a few moments less, I know you were setting up the story, but I think it took a little too long. My other critique is that you use too many transitions and the parts that they are used, there isnt any real plot movement, so, in a way, they are kinda pointless. When these parts do happen, try to at least do something, an example is when the professor calls out to Mario and 'end scene', we transtition to another scene having no idea why the professor called out to Mario, it's just kinda 'there'. I say these things because you spoke about having to submit short flashes. This is fine, but I think you can get more out of everything if you edit and cut somethings or at least, make it so there is more plot devolpment so that if it has to be short, it will really have us wanting more. As it is, I do want to see more, but it's because there was one real good piece of story and a side story...and we had to weave thru a lot of extra stuff to get to it. Please dont take this is anything more than critique and take it as nothing more than, in my opinion, will help you make a better flash. If you look thru my reviews, you will see that I speak at length only when I really hope something will be great!!